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Difficulty: EasyEliminating Wordiness

To prepare for the long hike, Sarah packed plenty of water, some snacks, and a first-aid kit in her backpack, which was a pack she carried on her back.

Which of the following options, if substituted for the underlined portion, makes the sentence most concise and grammatically correct?

  1. A
    NO CHANGE
  2. B
    . Which was carried by her
  3. DELETE the underlined portionAnswer
  4. D
    , being a pack on her back

Answer

Delete the underlined portion to remove the redundant description of the word 'backpack'.
The correct choice is to delete the underlined portion. The sentence already mentions a 'backpack,' which by definition is a pack carried on one's back. Adding a clause explaining this meaning is redundant. Deleting the underlined portion eliminates this redundancy, making the sentence clear and concise while maintaining grammatical correctness.

Step-by-Step Solution

1
Analyze the underlined portion in context of the sentence.
The sentence states that Sarah packed items 'in her backpack, which was a pack she carried on her back.'
To identify if there is any wordiness, redundancy, or grammatical errors in the original phrasing.
2
Identify the redundancy in the sentence.
A 'backpack' is defined as a pack carried on the back, making the phrase 'which was a pack she carried on her back' redundant.
Redundant descriptions should be eliminated to make the writing concise and standard for the ACT exam.
3
Evaluate the choices to find the most concise and grammatically correct option.
Deleting the underlined portion completely removes the redundancy without creating a grammatical error, leaving the clean sentence: 'To prepare for the long hike, Sarah packed plenty of water, some snacks, and a first-aid kit in her backpack.'
The correct ACT English choice for wordiness/redundancy is the most concise option that preserves meaning and grammar.

Key Concept

Eliminating redundant descriptions and wordy phrasing to ensure sentence conciseness.
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Eliminating Wordiness

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