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Difficulty: MediumEliminating Wordiness

At the 1893 World's Columbian Exposition in Chicago, Josephine Cochrane showcased her newly invented automatic dishwasher. A top prize was won by the machine, which was because the judges were highly impressed by its design and efficiency.

Which choice is the best version of the underlined portion of the sentence?

  1. A
    NO CHANGE
  2. The machine won a top prize because the judges were impressedAnswer
  3. C
    The machine won a top prize, the judges were impressed
  4. D
    Since the machine won a top prize because the judges were impressed

Answer

The machine won a top prize because the judges were impressed
The correct choice is active, concise, and grammatically correct. It removes the wordy, passive construction of the original sentence by using the active verb 'won' and directly stating the cause with 'because the judges were impressed'.

Step-by-Step Solution

1
Identify the underlined portion and evaluate it for conciseness and clarity.
The original phrasing is found to be wordy and passive, indicating that a revision is needed to make the sentence direct and active.
ACT style favors active verbs and conciseness when grammatically correct.
2
Analyze the choices to find the one that is grammatically correct and the most concise.
The option stating 'The machine won a top prize because the judges were impressed' is concise, active, and grammatically complete. The option with 'the judges were impressed' creates a comma splice, and the option starting with 'Since' results in a sentence fragment.
Eliminating wordiness must not introduce grammatical errors like comma splices or sentence fragments.

Key Concept

Eliminating Wordiness
Estimated Time:1m 0s
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